Most readers and reviewers love The Werewolf Upstairs. However, I read one review recently that may have been written by someone who didn't care for romantic comedy. The person called my dialog stilted--and then edited the following lines from my couple's first kiss until it DID sound stilted. That's not fair!
Tell me what you think. If your "crush" ran out into traffic to grab a two-year old, what would your next breathless words be? I think my attorney heroine did just fine.
“I can’t believe you saved that child without getting
“Yeah, I don’t know what I was thinking. I guess I
wasn’t thinking at all, just reacting to the situation.”
“You were so brave and so selfless.” And so amazing
He smiled and placed a finger under her chin. Tipping
her face up, he bent low, hovering just over her lips.
“Can I have a kiss as my reward?”
“I’m sure the boy’s mother would have kissed you if
you’d asked.” She was teasing, but also trying to keep
her distance. After all, he had just been in trouble with
“I didn’t want to kiss her. I’m asking you.”
Aw, I’m melting. Roz slipped her arms around his neck
and closed her eyes.
He held her in a surprisingly gentle
embrace and closed the short gap between their lips.
The pressure was just right. Firm, but not bruising. He
opened his mouth slightly and slanted his head, allowing
her to deepen the kiss if she wanted to. She answered by
slipping her tongue past his teeth, but something sharp
She almost pulled away, but his big paw of a hand
cradled her head and kept her mouth fused to his. He
slipped his tongue past her lips and lapped at the sore
spot. Suddenly the pain faded and disappeared.
Roz let her body mold to his and felt petite in his
arms. Now, that’s a first.
The hot, drugging kiss continued, right there on the
sidewalk, heedless of passersby and traffic. The world fell
away, and soon the only thing she could name that existed
outside herself was his arousal nudging her stomach.
She even wanted to incorporate the hard length inside
her body and join with him completely. Whoa, where
did that thought come from?
“It came from us, darling.”
Roz snapped out of her trance. Pulling away, she
mumbled, “Wha…what just happened?”
Konrad kissed her forehead and smiled. “I think it’s
“You heard me?”
“Yes, as if you were speaking inside my head.”
Shocked, Roz lost the power to communicate—or
Konrad stroked her cheek with his thumb. “It’s never
happened to me before, but I’ve heard of it. Certain
members of my family can do it with their m…uh,
people they’re very close to.”
She inhaled deeply and tried to steady herself. “Well,
I’ve never heard of it happening to anyone at all.”
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Has that ever happened to you? Not the telepathy part. LOL. Ever had your words twisted or taken out of context? How is that helpful?